Confused I am as I cogitate,
Whom can I liken you; my soul mate!
Drops of the first rain that never lose charm,
Or Waves of the Sea that mesmerize all.
Fire of the hearth that makes abodes warm,
Or Stroke of the Lightning making farmers enthrall.
Gentle Breeze that brings you a smile,
Or the Tempest that makes a voyage worthwhile.
Smile of a mother holding her baby,
Or the Laughter of a Clown deceiving many.
Tears of a mother when her son departs,
Or Tears of a Father when his son makes a mark.
Red color of the Roses, that makes a love thrive,
Or Red color of the blood, that gives us our lives.
Myriad are the ways I tend to conceive you,
Still greater are your virtues as time unfolds you.
My confusion evanesces as I miss you,
You are Life and Life is you.
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7 comments:
my favorite lines
"Myriad are the ways I tend to conceive you,
Still greater are your virtues as time unfolds you.
My confusion evanesces as I miss you,
You are Life and Life is you."
every drop of emotion is highly valued ... and aisa poem .... WOW ... u have to tell me its origin ... i mean on whom/about whom ??
agar aise hii likha hai to double salute be .... professional writer bangaya tu ... :)
bravo ....
kya babu ? itna sento kavita kahe ko likh rahe ho yaar (agar likhi hai to) ? as ashutosh says agar likhi hai to hats off to you !!
Hey, kabeer....4 years together and I didn't know that thr is hidden talented and sentimental poetaround me...GR8 work.
Keep posting.
amazing one buddy...real feelings in thr..and well if this is ur first poem i wonder wat made u wait for so long..keep churning out these masterpieces time and again...and most importantly write because you care and not 'coz u have to...you would have a great collection in no time!!!!
well gud try can b termed. an autobiographical tone can b detected underlying it yet i think that the confusion takes the better of it. seems u wanna know sth , u feel it in ur thots , u hav it in ur feelings, it is perhaps the tenderness of instinct that makes u feel so, precisely it is rather a tough task to give it a name but i feel u r luking 4 a good &novel thing, do it, who knows u might find life itself? towards the end seems that ur confusion has evanesced, gud thing, all is well that ends well. waise gud work ,well done too. seems u hav a championing attitude over fate? waise i think no i feel that the conception is that of life itself, am i right ? (well u know to cogitate is thinking carefully, 'liken' is gud spirit of experimentation and a poetic licence.) rest online why don't u try? btw a well worded expression and truely speaking i loved reading it, no to put it justifiably , living it, with all the sentiments, it has been composed with. keep giving us the same moments to live with u , feel the way u do and i swear on myself i would love another one from u. love
Awesome job, man :)
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